Friday 15 January 2016

Film Noir OTS Script 1

Producing the script has been done mainly by Josh Coe with help from me. This is the first publication of the script, further improvements may be added if necessary.
The cast in the opening scene:
Josh Coe: Tony (Everyman)
Heather McDonald: Victoria (Femme Fatale)

EXT. Road. Night

(Tony leaning against wall looking at empty wallet)

Tony: 
(voiceover)
(hopeless)
I lost it all, she took everything I had. I'm left with nothing but dreams, of what could have been.

(Tony tosses wallet away and walks off)



OPENING TITLE SEQUENCE 



Tony:
(voiceover)
(desperation)
Theres only one thing left to do, she deserves it.

(Tony stands behind wall to hide)

Tony:
(voiceover)
(with love)
This is the route she walks everyday, I'd never forget.

(Victoria becomes visible walking through the alley, a cigarette in hand)

Tony:
(voiceover)
(with hope)
She still looks as beautiful as she did the first time I saw her.

(Victoria walks past Tony but can't see him)

Tony:
(voiceover)
(more hate)
 She's blinded from the world, she deserves this.

(Victoria continues walking as Tony appears from the darkness)

Tony:
(aggression)
Hey Victoria!

(Victoria turns quickly and shock fills her face)

Victoria:
(Gasps)

(Tony pulls the trigger and the camera looms on the cigarette burning out)

Josh's advanced level of creativity in writing allowed us to create a conventional Film Noir script that suits the visual aspect to the film perfectly. As a team, we worked really well with me creating the general structure for the script and Josh developed the content. Josh had previous experience with writing a script for an A-level therefore no previous research was needed; he taught me how to effectively make a script and the stage directions are a great aspect because the reader becomes aware of the narrative without watching the extract.
On the other hand, it was often hard to reach a final decision on the voice overs, the two of us eventually made a decision but it could be argued that time was wasted during this process.

When creating the script, I have learnt that my creative levels are not to the quality of others.


2 comments:

  1. good work - add a reflective comment - we will discuss in class

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  2. Great evidence of collaboration between the two of you to construct a very good script

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